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雅思寫作考試的出題范圍比較廣,建議大家平時多積累一些寫作素材,以便在考試中靈活使用。接下來給大家推薦的是雅思作文:素材庫之兒童使用電腦的利弊,供大家學習借鑒。

雅思寫作考試的出題范圍比較廣,建議大家平時多積累一些寫作素材,以便在考試中靈活使用。接下來給大家推薦的是雅思作文:素材庫之兒童使用電腦的利弊,供大家學習借鑒。

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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Doyou agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge orexperience. Write at leas 250 words.

考官的回答:五段58-51-47-75-42字,總共273字。全文12句,只有一句是簡單句。其余都是復雜句,復合句。

起》第一段考官引言

復雜句 1. I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much timespent on the computer every day.(第一句話:申論主題。同意試題的立場--學童過分專注電腦,產生不良影響。)

復雜句 2. This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long time can be damaging toboth the eyes and physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using thecomputer for.(第二句話:考官并沒有明顯的指引出中體段落的論證方向??脊倜钤谥赋鰺o論電腦的用途如何,如果天天久久坐在銀幕前面,對于幼童的眼睛和身體有害。這一點,在中體三段中,并沒有按牌面發(fā)展下去。注意到引言中一針見血,看不到嘔心的鸚鵡句子,如“銅板有兩面”,“有人認為,也有人認為,至于我個人則認為,”——陳腐廢話。)

承》第二段考官中體段A

復雜句 1. However, the main concern is about the type of computer activities that affectchildren.(指標句:topic sentence)

復雜句 2. These are often electronic games that tend to be very intense and rather violent.

復合句 3. The player is usually the 'hero' of the game and too much exposure can encouragechildren to be self-centered and insensitive to others.

轉》第三段考官主體段B

復合句 1. Even when children use a computer for other purposes, such as getting information oremailing friends, it is no substitute for human interaction.(指標句:topic sentence)

復雜句 2. Spending time with other children and sharing non-virtual experiences is an importantpart of a child's development that cannot be provided by a computer.

轉》第四段考官主體段C

簡單句 1. In spite of this, the obvious benefits of computer skills for young children cannot bedenied.(指標句:topic sentence)

復合句 2. Their adult world will be changing constantly in terms of technology and the Internetis key to all the knowledge and information available in the world today.

復雜句 3. Therefore it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipmententhusiastically and with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studiesand working lives.

合》第五段考官結論

復雜句 1. I think the main point is to make sure that young children do not overuse computers.(重申主題)

復雜句 2. Parents must ensure that their children learn to enjoy other kinds of activity and notsimply sit at home, learning to live in a virtual world.(提出建議)

具體范文參考

起——positive—academically and professionally

承——academically

轉——professionally

合——academically and professionally—positive

起——引言 Introduction

While excessive exposure to the computer screen can be damaging to children physically andmentally, the overall effects of using the computer, and along with it the Internet, are morepositive than negative. It is understood that children should be encouraged to use and not tooveruse this modern technological equipment. The views for supporting this argument areacademic and professional.

承——中體 Body A

From an academic perspective, computers are an invaluable resource to help studentsexplore the world around them. To start with, children who use the Internet to satisfy theircuriosity about diverse academic disciplines are already becoming independent learners.That is one reason why children should acquire enough computer skills at an early age.Further, at various learning stages, more information and knowledge can be made accessible tothem more easily anytime and anywhere. There is no denying that computer skills have becomea must-have throughout young people's studies in today's world. It is also clear that, in theacademic environment, computers are actually an essential part of everyday life.

轉——中體 Body B

In view of children's professional success later in life, the importance of these computer skillscannot be over-emphasized. People who do not know well how to use such technology are likelyto be disadvantaged in the workplace. Nowadays, parents are increasingly aware that allowingtheir children to use the computer daily for a couple of hours is not a waste of time, but isactually preparing them for future jobs. That is to day, it is an investment in the child's futurecareer because computer skills are also job skills. So, in a positive sense, the moreenthusiastically children use the computer, the more confidence they will have when lookingfor employment in the time to come. Such benefits are just too obvious to be ignored.

合——結論 Conclusion

To conclude, the computer is playing a critical role in young people's learning experience andfuture working lives. However, the point is that parents should as well monitor their children'sscreen time for health reasons. After all, as a technological tool, the computer is here to stay.

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