你的雅思寫作可讀性高嗎

選擇合適的語法結(jié)構(gòu)可以使句子意思的表達(dá)更為精確和簡(jiǎn)練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要，但選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。今天留學(xué)監(jiān)理網(wǎng)就給大家介紹下你的雅思寫作可讀性高嗎。

雅思寫作練習(xí)時(shí)，很多考生認(rèn)為長(zhǎng)難句能夠提升文章的語言質(zhì)量并因此獲得更高的分?jǐn)?shù)。然而有時(shí)一味地追求句子的長(zhǎng)度反而會(huì)犧牲句子的“可讀性”與“句法準(zhǔn)確性”。下面我們就來看一些例子，體會(huì)一些寫得并不成功的長(zhǎng)句和如何修改的建議：

建議一：避免空洞的單詞和詞組

1.一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關(guān)的或重要的信息，完全可以被刪掉。

比如：When all things are considered, young adults of today live moresatisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

這句話當(dāng)中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：

Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

2.有些空洞和繁瑣的表達(dá)方式可以進(jìn)行替換

例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to helptheir parents, they did not have the options that young people have at thispoint in time.

“due to the fact that”就是一個(gè)很典型的繁瑣的表達(dá)方式的例子，可以替換，簡(jiǎn)化為下面的表達(dá)方式：

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did nothave the options that young people have now.

建議二：避免重復(fù)

1.盡量避免重復(fù)使用同樣的詞匯。或者有的時(shí)候雖然詞匯沒有重復(fù)，但意思卻有重復(fù)。這時(shí)候可以做一些簡(jiǎn)化的工作。

例如下面這個(gè)例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

large對(duì)一個(gè)farm來說就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改為：

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

更簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)方式為：

My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

2.有時(shí)一個(gè)詞組可以用一個(gè)更簡(jiǎn)單的單詞來替換

例如：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on hisparents' farm.

這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly，顯得更為簡(jiǎn)潔：

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents'farm.

建議三：選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)

選擇合適的語法結(jié)構(gòu)可以使句子意思的表達(dá)更為精確和簡(jiǎn)練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要，但選擇最恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下原則是在考慮選擇何種語法結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)可以參考的原則：

1.一個(gè)句子的主語和謂語動(dòng)詞應(yīng)該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思。

例如：The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to studyengineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

從意思上來分析，上面這句話需要表達(dá)的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able tostudy”，而在表達(dá)這個(gè)概念時(shí)，原句用的主語是situation，謂語動(dòng)詞是was，不能強(qiáng)調(diào)需要表達(dá)的重點(diǎn)概念，可以改為下面這句話：

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help onthe farm.

2.避免頻繁使用“there be”結(jié)構(gòu)。

例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milkevery day. It was hard work for my grandfather.

可以改為：

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm everyday.

更簡(jiǎn)潔的句式為：

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

3.把從句改為短語或單詞。

例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers fromthe nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

簡(jiǎn)介的表達(dá)方式為：

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearestuniversity.

4.僅在需要強(qiáng)調(diào)賓語而不是主語的時(shí)候，才使用被動(dòng)語態(tài)。

例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the haywas mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family.

本句不夠簡(jiǎn)潔的原因是本句的重心應(yīng)該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather'sfamily”，而使用了被動(dòng)語態(tài)後，彷佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達(dá)方式是主動(dòng)語態(tài)，相對(duì)來說更簡(jiǎn)潔一些：

In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowedand stacked the hay.

5.用更為精確的一個(gè)動(dòng)詞來代替動(dòng)詞短語。

例如：My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with hisschool friends.

Stand around doing nothing其實(shí)可以用一個(gè)動(dòng)詞來表達(dá)，即loiter:

My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends.

6.有時(shí)兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合完全可以用一句話來簡(jiǎn)練地表達(dá)。

例如：Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small tomeet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for auniversity degree.

兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡(jiǎn)潔的句子：

Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operationalexpenses, let alone pay for a university degree.

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